雅思考官大作文指导：家庭中男女分工

>>雅思作文范文：雅思考官大作文指导：家庭中男女分工

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今天我们来讲一篇大作文，以一些Family Topic的作文为例，重点讲一下什么是文章的Skeleton。前雅思考官说，the skeleton (or framework or basic structure) of a task 2 essay is:

- the introduction

- topic sentences for main paragraphs

- and the conclusion

就是说，他认为文章的Skeleton(就是文章的框架或基本结构)就是开头介绍、主体段落和结论段落。在写作文之前先写Skeleton我们来看一下：

People have different views about whether parents or schools should bear the responsibility for helping children to become good citizens. In my view, this responsibility should be shared.

On the one hand, parents certainly have a vital role to play in the upbringing of their children.

On the other hand, school teachers may contribute almost as much as parents to the development of a child.

In conclusion, both parents and schools should work together to ensure that young people become polite and productive members of society.

大家可以看出，Skeleton已经把这篇作文的信息表达得非常清楚了，惟一缺失的就是主体段落，即第二、三段中的细节。建议大家在写作文之前都把Skeleton写到这种程度。

接下来给大家带来前雅思考官最著名的建议之大作文只要写13句。分布在各个段落中的名子数量如下：

·  Introduction: 2 sentences

·First main body paragraph: 5 sentences

·Second main body paragraph: 5 sentences

·Conclusion: 1 sentence

有的同学可能会担心字数太少，前雅思考官说如果大家看他的作文看多了, you'll see that I usually manage to write 250 words or more in this way. I think it seems a lot less scary if you think that your task is to write just 13 sentences!

雅思考官的满分作文都写250+，所以大家也不必一味追求字数，重点还是在于文章的内容，当然了，13句话也不是绝对的，提醒大家: It is not a 'rule' that you must write 13 sentences. This is just my approach or method.大家写作文的时候要根据自己的情况而定。

接下来以这篇作文为例，大家先自己试着写一下Skeleton，然后和前雅思考官写的做下比较。

These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

Here's 前雅思考官’s sample essay skeleton:

Introduction

It is true that men are increasingly likely to take on the role of househusband, while more women than ever are the breadwinners in their families. There could be several reasons for this, and I consider it to be a very positive trend.

Main body 1, topic sentence

In recent years, parents have had to adapt to various changes in our societies.

Main body 2, topic sentence

In my view, the changes described above should be seen as progress.

Conclusion

In conclusion, the changing roles of men and women in the family are a result of wider changes in society, and I believe that these developments are desirable.

大家的Skeleton是否清晰表达了整篇文章的观点和结构呢?是否发现自己写的文章比以往更加精简了呢?前雅思考官说，For many of the students I've taught, a breakthrough (or big improvement) came when they found the confidence to write in a more 'simple' way.当你不再纠结文章中是否包含passives, conditionals or 'difficult academic words'的时候，you are free to focus on answering the question and explaining your ideas coherently.你就会将注意力放在如何顺畅地表达你的观点。It takes confidence to change your approach and to believe that the 'simple' way will work.这会更加自信用更加simple的方式来写作。

提醒大家，这里说的Simple，绝对不是Easy!要想写出高分文章，还是要在Vocabulary、Grammar、Idea三个方面下苦功!

完整范文如下：

It is true that men are increasingly likely to take on the role of househusband, while more women than ever are the breadwinners in their families. There could be several reasons for this, and I consider it to be a very positive trend.

In recent years, parents have had to adapt to various changes in our societies. Equal rights movements have made great progress, and it has become normal for women to gain qualifications and pursue a career. It has also become socially acceptable for men to stay at home and look after their children. At the same time, the rising cost of living has meant that both marriage partners usually need to work and save money before starting a family. Therefore, when couples have children, they may decide who works and who stays at home depending on the personal preference of each partner, or based on which partner earns the most money.

In my view, the changes described above should be seen as progress. We should be happy to live in a society in which men and women have equal opportunities, and in which women are not put under pressure to sacrifice their careers. Equally, it seems only fair that men should be free to leave their jobs in order to assume childcare responsibilities if this is what they wish to do. Couples should be left to make their own decisions about which parental role each partner takes, according to their particular circumstances and needs.

In conclusion, the changing roles of men and women in the family are a result of wider changes in society, and I believe that these developments are desirable.

(274 words, band 9)

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